Critique of the poem “Fly”

Poetry FlyThe poet, one of our very own from the village of St. Joseph, is the author of some great local writings. The one most captivating to me that I have read so far is the poem “Fly”.

Fly

And when you open your beautiful wings

Shelter my body

From the heat

That falls over it.

Fly.

 

Fly

And carry me on your open wings,

Carry me

Away from this depressed land

That sends me raging.

Fly

And take me with you.

 

Fly

And take me to your nesting place

Atop those green mountains

Where I will find peace

Where I will be happy.

Fly

And take me away with you.

 

Fly

And take me on your wings

Above those beautiful white clouds

To a place of sanity

A place of peace.

Fly and take me where you will.

Carry me with you.

 

Take me away

Where I won’t be lonely and depressed

For I’ll find you there

To help me along.

 

Come, open your wings

Carry me

Take me away

For I want to be free.

Free from the shackles,

Free from the ills of society,

Free from the problems that confront me

On this Land.

 

The poet mentioned that growing up as a child he was always in close touch with nature so it’s no surprise that the poem relates he starts off with sunny scenery which is more than common for us in the Caribbean.

The persona seems to be speaking a non-human, that may be less judgemental and more compassionate than a human, like himself, possibly he could be referring to God or a bird. A bird is usually thought to symbolize freedom. It gives a sense of a longing or hope for freedom,an escape, “away from this depressed land that sends me raging”. It seems that the progress of his country is too slow and life is too hard.

We all have our own idea of a peaceful place and the speaker wants to be atop green mountains surrounded by nature. We can understand where he’s coming from since we may have experienced the calming effect of getting lost in nature.

Going above the white clouds could refer to the heavens above where there is utmost peace. Then he goes on channeling more emotions being frank about the depression and loneliness as well as saying “for i’ll find you there to help me along”.As stated earlier, he’s probably referring to God and implying that he feels safety and comfort in his care that he can’t with humans.

Throughout our  lives we seek freedom from something, someone or somewhere. A freedom as great as a bird’s ability to soar above clouds. This brings me to my favorite lines derived from the last stanza:

“Take me away

For I want to be free

Free from the shackles

Free from the ills of society

Free from the problems that confront me on this land.”

What I get from this is an allusion from slavery days, a sense of desire for emancipation. Freedom from the drilling of how it is thought that we should live our lives, the constant judgement and corruption in society and the struggles faced in day to day life.

It’s good that you can get precise imagery as you read the poem and the fact that pretty much anyone can connect to it through personal experiences and emotions. There is a consistency with the the title of the poem, simultaneously creating a steady flow throughout the poem. However, he could’ve gone in depth and maybe give a more detailed situation which led to the depressed mood and the feeling of bondage to create greater connection with the readers.

Also, this piece may be frowned upon by some  who may view it as painting a poor picture of a country. Generally, it is quite a relatable and powerful poem. At times, even I feel like getting on some wings and flying away.

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6 Comments

  1. April 6, 2016

    It seems the setting for this lovely poem is Dominica. If it can be borrowed I suspect it could be transported to another place and applied by another person to their homeland.

    I see somebody who is not at peace with their native surroundings and longs to get away. This individual
    is asking somebody or rather something for help.

    Take me away for I want to be free.

    Free from …

    Shackles, ills of society, and problems that confront me.

    Help comes from above. Our friend hopes to be delivered on eagle’s wings and taken to a better place.

    The Apostle Paul wrote “Moreover, brethren, I declare unto you the gospel… … … how that Christ died for our sins…. and that he was buried, and that he rose again the third day…” (1 Corinthians 15:1-4)

    “For I am not ashamed of the gospel of Christ: for it is the power of salvation to ever one who believeth; to the Jew first, and also to the Greek.” (Romans 1:16)

    Continued …

    Sincerely, Rev. Donald Hill…

    • April 6, 2016

      Continuation ..

      God will deliver “…us from the power of darkness, and (translate) us into the kingdom of his dear Son. In whom we have redemption through his blood, even the forgiveness of sins.” (Colossians 1:13,14)

      Sincerely, Rev. Donald Hill. Evangelist.

      • April 6, 2016

        The writer wants to be taken away, transported to another place, removed from the shackles of society, and the problems…

        He cannot save himself so he is looking above to somebody or something beyond himself for help. This is so much like the gospel (good news) of Jesus Christ. Where will He take us and how will it improve our lot?

        The Lord Jesus said “I am the door: BY ME if any man enter in he shall be saved, and shall go in and out, and find pasture.” (John 10:9)

        The Apostle Paul wrote “Therefore if any man be in Christ, he is a new creature: old things are passed away; behold, all things are become new. All things are of God, who hath reconciled us to himself by Jesus Christ, …” (2 Corinthians 5:17,18)

        I invite you to visit our website at http://www.livinghopeministries.ca

        Click onto SERMONS. Listen to my sermon THE NEW BIRTH.

        Sincerely, Rev. Donald Hill. Evangelist.

  2. Roger Burnett
    April 5, 2016

    I am assuming that Nerfertarie St. Louis is the reviewer of the poem. However, unless my eyesight has failed me, we are left in the dark as to the name of the poet. Other than that, both poet and critic have done an excellent job. The illustration also deserves credit.

    All of those with a love for poetry, and especially aspiring local poets, should tune into Vibes Radio 93.9FM this evening (Tuesday 5th April) at 7pm when Ian Jackson will be interviewing Shawna Johnson. Over the years Shawna has single-handedly moved mountains in order to nurture poetry through her initiative, “Lyrics under the Stars”.

  3. anonymous2
    April 5, 2016

    Nice thought. If only people could create that here. Until then, one has to fly away.

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